
image by Rick Mobbs – Mine Enemy Grows Older
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Icy fingertips comb through thinning hair, tracing their nails heavily through a burning scalp. Palm pressed against raging forehead, fingers grind into opposing temples. Eyelids pressed shut conceal twisted rivers of blood behind a veil of blackness. Diving desperately inward, I seek liberty, but find only an infinite spiral into the screaming pit of my lungs. The nauseating threat of madness forces confession from my eyes. Glaring through a steamy haze upon moonlit silhouettes, I find no source of comfort, nor source of inspiration. I reach out to that bright lunar sphere with a possessed imagination that mocks my naïve attempt. “You are a fool”, he laughs disdainfully. “You cannot escape me. Look back upon your writings and you will see”.
“No”, I protest angrily as I reach for my spear. “Your ghosts, your pretences, can all go to hell”.
With one murderous thrust, I pierce the throat of my adversary. Shocked, disbelieving eyes stare back at me across the shaft of my bloodstained weapon.
“I gave you the power to recognise beauty…”, says he with a garbled dying breath.
“Thank you”, I offer as I drop the lifeless body to the earth, and turn away.
“And now, in peaceful solitude, I shall enjoy that beauty”.
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by Brad Frederiksen
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The dreaded fog descended this week, but thanks to all of the great prompts, and my recognition that quite a few of you have been facing the same demon, I had plenty of inspiration to work with. Many thanks.
July 21, 2008 at 1:30 am |
Wow! Good stuff! I followed the link from readwritepoem. Very powerful. Congrats on dealing with the demon. My son, when he was 5, named this image “moonscraper”. It is funny you should choose it as I almost put it up this week as the prompt.
July 21, 2008 at 3:05 am |
That is indeed very powerful. I suppose rest must follow such a victory.
July 21, 2008 at 4:28 am |
Beautiful image. Intense, powerful writing.
July 21, 2008 at 5:21 am |
your ghost sounds like a naysayer that had to be let go. nice.
July 21, 2008 at 7:01 am |
What an amazing painting! I won’t list them, but it took me on a quite a trip of associations to various myths and cultures. Intense, as is your writing. May you always perceive beauty.
July 21, 2008 at 8:34 am |
powerful and intense – boiling over with anger!!!
July 21, 2008 at 9:22 am |
This is a powerful piece of writing, full of imagery and edginess.
July 21, 2008 at 4:27 pm |
Very thought provoking. There is a lot of inner conflict going on here, We all wrestle with our demons.
Thank You for sharing this.
July 22, 2008 at 1:55 am |
Wow, this gave me the willies! Very powerful words and art.
July 22, 2008 at 3:50 am |
Powerful words – powerful!
July 22, 2008 at 4:53 am |
Yes, very intense and a creative and vivid rendering of the pursuit of artistic understanding.
July 22, 2008 at 7:52 am |
This is great, love the wording – it reminds me of one of those 199 word stories. The image you chose is striking too at first glance not unlike Ricketts design for Montezuma.
I enjoyed reading this.
July 22, 2008 at 7:59 am |
very dramatic! wild response to the painting prompt!
July 22, 2008 at 9:31 am |
Perfect everything…length,tone, intensity and mystery.
b
July 23, 2008 at 1:47 am |
i really enjoyed this.
I’m glad you fought your way through the fog!
empty garden
July 23, 2008 at 4:58 am |
I read this piece as an extended metaphor of panic fear, depression, that horrible feeling. I’m glad the demon lost this round.
July 23, 2008 at 5:08 am |
Brad–
I loved this. My heart rate actually increased.
Karen
July 23, 2008 at 5:09 am |
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July 23, 2008 at 5:35 am |
Amazing what an image can evoke! Love the idea you got from the painting!