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blue periwinkles
safe beneath the shepherd’s star
graze in the valley
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by Brad Frederiksen
for the RWP Prompt – Get Your Poem on #40
This photo was taken at Dee Why Beach this week. Hope you enjoy the Haiku moment.
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August 18, 2008 at 7:46 pm |
Serenity – in words and image.
August 18, 2008 at 8:44 pm |
Beautiful — I really like how the moment in the photo and the poem work together.
August 18, 2008 at 10:43 pm |
Really lovely, both the photo and the word painting.
August 18, 2008 at 11:02 pm |
excellent… both the photo and the poem. It does capture the moment and its peacefull feeling.
August 18, 2008 at 11:52 pm |
I read this in my feed reader and liked it on a metaphorical level but was a bit confused… now I see the picture it makes perfect sense and is a lovely little snapshot in itself!
Thanks Lirone. I wonder… do you think that a Haiku should express the moment without a photo? I tend to think the answer is yes, but surely that would disqualify moments such as this! Any thoughts? Is my Haiku really an example of Ekphrasis?
August 19, 2008 at 2:03 am |
I love periwinkles…
plunging in the tunneled abyss
August 19, 2008 at 3:52 am |
I love the idea of the periwinkles grazing!
August 20, 2008 at 7:48 am |
This works for me. Very nice haiku.
Thanks Peter. Nice of you to visit.
August 20, 2008 at 5:58 pm |
Thanks everyone. Following Lirone’s comment, I have asked whether this is actually a Haiku. The question is of course open, and I am curious to hear your thoughts. Cheers.
August 21, 2008 at 12:18 am |
Lovely.
August 21, 2008 at 2:25 am |
Brad – good question!
For me the first thing I think of when someone says “periwinkles” is the flower, so I wasn’t quite sure how they could be grazing!
Generally I think haiku should stand alone, and misundestandings aside this one does. However, I think in this case the photo supplies a completely different level of meaning which you don’t (or at least, I didn’t) get from the words alone.
August 21, 2008 at 2:27 am |
meant to add, yes, I do think it’s a haiku – it has the right sort of compactness and economy of words. I’m not a haiku purist though…
August 21, 2008 at 6:10 am |
a haiku with a photo is a haiga, a modern day version of an ancient and venerated japanese art form. Though haiku can of course stand by themselves as well.