. Back in a moment <<<
Hold that thought.
Slip into something
becoming.
Look in my eyes……
No!!! Look
in my eyes.
¿
Hang on a second
I’m coming.
Maekitso’s Café
Random inspiration and thought provocation. Hot and cold refreshments.
. Back in a moment <<<
Hold that thought.
Slip into something
becoming.
Look in my eyes……
No!!! Look
in my eyes.
¿
Hang on a second
I’m coming.
May 23, 2009 at 3:34 am |
and I am waiting…
Nicely done!
May 23, 2009 at 6:14 am |
perfectly captures the slippery slope that is my experience with meditative states.
May 23, 2009 at 3:49 pm |
You can not feeze things in time, it’s a futile fight.But you can have great sex anyway.
May 23, 2009 at 9:45 pm |
short and open and full of things to hang on about.
May 24, 2009 at 1:38 am |
…dependent but not dependent on another…
Really like the period at the beginning, and the arrows suggesting a desire to eventually travel back to an original starting point…
…and then the suspension of communion, followed by a few commands…
and of course there is this tension of waiting for what I suspect will never come…
…complex, compact, and compelling. I like it. Well Done.
Poet Man
May 24, 2009 at 8:36 am |
Economical, precise and a very astute observation of the silliness of sexuality. This made me grin, see?—> :)
Up the hill
And
Over the edge
It gets damn chilly
On the ledge
Good vibes to you.
May 24, 2009 at 3:59 pm |
Ah, your style of late is deep, poignant and totally hilarious!
May 25, 2009 at 7:46 am |
Cool, one moment extrapolated backward and forward in time, very original style and structure, creative use of punctuation is one of my favourite things. It’s a very visual poem, as much a thing to look at as to read.
May 25, 2009 at 11:56 am |
Teasingly erotic and playful! The best kind of sex, oh… I mean, poetry. Yes. That’s what I meant.
May 25, 2009 at 2:47 pm |
Funny. And true!
May 25, 2009 at 3:19 pm |
Reads like my 20s…
May 27, 2009 at 10:58 pm |
I love this structure and punctuation. Have you ever seen/read any of Pi.O’s work? The relationship between the layout and the content here reminds me a little of his work…and I mean that as the highest compliment, he’s one of my greatest inspirations.
May 29, 2009 at 8:48 pm |
Phew, love the way you do this, it took the narrator exactly ten seconds to come.
May 29, 2009 at 11:06 pm |
gad, i’m so naive.